…of fallen petals


What words my lips have said, to lose you, why?
To cry with thy sky, standing all alone,
Wet wind and rain, it reminds of you, moan
Of those nights, to touch you and kiss you – shy!
My hands over you and our eyes speak, my
Lust precedes over love; we’re done, unknown!
Ecstasy – O’er your skin, I should’ve known
What words my lips have said, to lose you, why?

The cute rose blooms on a wet rainy day,
Falls in love with wind, that blows on its face,
Nor knows why wind makes love to it that day:
Yet the rose strips the petals with thy grace,
I’m too late to realize that she is lost,
All I have is fallen petals at last.


Sonnet, It’s not easy to write a Sonnet and this one after a long gap, so please pardon me, if I’m wrong anywhere 😀 Also, I’ve taken the liberty of repeating the first line as eight line, after considering two of my poetic friends, and they too agreed! I’d be happy to read your footprints 😀

The Sonnet Form:

The eight-line stanza, called an octave, uses two rhyme words. The first line rhymes with the fourth, fifth, and eighth lines; the second with the third, sixth, and seventh. (abba abba) In the six-line finale (the sestet), can be of any one of this forms. Either abcabc, ababab or, if you want to summarize in last two lines, ababcc. The above sestet is of form ababcc

0 Replies to “…of fallen petals”

  1. Nice attempt. The emotions are strong as usual.

    But technically it can't be called a sonnet – Italian Sonnets are not supposed to end in couplets and generally refrains don't occur in sonnets.

  2. @ The Fool

    Nice attempt. The emotions are strong as usual.

    But technically it can't be called a sonnet – Italian Sonnets are not supposed to end in couplets and generally refrains don't occur in sonnets.

    @The Fool Bro,

    Welcome back! Hmm Thanks again for your sweet encouraging words..

    Regarding Sonnet, I've followed the rules of Petrarchan Sonnet, in which the sestet can be of three types as mentioned above 😀 and as far as I know there are no rules regarding the refrain 😀 and this is my test, who knows in future people may start using this kind as well crediting me!!!

    Thanks bro again! keep writing!

    Someone is Special

  3. A sweet poem…where did u lose her?
    why did u lose her?
    How?
    🙂 Is there a story to it? Is it the next pic story that u have posted.. about the couple on the beach?

  4. @ Punam

    as I said, do you think there is a relation between the both..? Hmmm who knows it may be.. No, I will never loose my dream girl.. I know she will be with me forever.. 😀

    Thanks for your sweet comment..

    Someone is Special

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